HL2 fanfic "The Humans Strike Back"

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“The Humans Strike Back”


“Work faster!”, the combine soldier snapped at the scientist, burying the front of his weapon deep into Dr. Kleiner’s lab coat. “Forgive me”, he stuttered, “I simply lost track of the pumping interface systems, I will be regaining traction in a matter of moments.” The Combine shook his head “the inefficacy of you humans is intensely annoying”, then he merely grunted, turning his attention to the large blinding windows now suffused with the sun’ early light.

It had been an accident that allowed the pathetic humans to rebel, a leak in the modified water genome tanks that kept the remnants of humanity superhumanly fit and the Combine’s industrial centers up and running. After the Combine’s initial invasion, they drained the Earth of its water supply burrowing it underground in vast tanks so that it would be “purified” by the water filtration systems.

But somehow a leak had occurred, some suggested that one of the many alien parasitic ecosystems swarming underneath the Combine and human settlements, found their way into the tanks and mutated into what had been known as the “Hydras”, translucent blue, multi-tentacle creatures that inhabited any and all water sources left on Earth, grew so large and untamed that the tanks could no longer hold them, and the metallic structures broke under the pressure.

This leak caused an imbalance to the Combine’s own ecosystems, the modified genome water instead flowing copiously into the human settlements. While the Combine were recovering from this disaster, the humans were experimenting with the abundant genome substance. After awhile, they were able to produce clones, a mixture of Combine and alien hive technology. These clones soon evolved to the point that this was not anymore a war of attrition (the numbers of the city 17 personnel represented what cloning batch they originated from), but one of superior technology and tactical manipulation of the present circumstances.

However, the Combine were sensing victory, having infiltrated the rebel’s labs. Killing many of the science team members, and only leaving several of the senior researchers alive to operate the water propulsion systems. Dr. Kleiner was one of them.

A low rumbling sound from above alerted the Combine soldier to attention. Dr. Kleiner looked up, only to be rebuked by the soldier, who gave a savage gesture to continue his work. The soldier glanced up once again, only to see a large, black shape take the place of the vibrant blue sky. Within moments, he could here shouts and mangled radio transmissions, they were coming closer.

Suddenly, a loud harsh pounding of the air vents caused him to lift his automatic weapon. Without further warning, a deafening explosion showered clouds of dust and debris on top of him. Before he could recover, the black-clad soldiers of City 17 were on him, and his body smacked the far wall as they unloaded their weapons simultaneously on him.

One soldier turned his attention to Dr. Kleiner, who cowered for a moment before speaking. “M-may I be of assistance to you?”. For an answer the soldier pointed his weapon at the computer system resting on the ramshackle wooden desk, and unloaded his clip into the machine until it lay in a pile of pathetic twisted machinery at his feet. “I don’t think you will be needed that anymore”, the soldier said, giving a cruel smile. Dr. Kleiner simply nodded, following the soldiers out into the bright sunlight.
 
whats that? ,is a video?
thats something oficial or just something you heard?
 
cool is the soldier in the end supposed to be gordon
 
<RJMC> said:
whats that? ,is a video?
thats something oficial or just something you heard?

Wow is it that good that you thought it was official?! lol /me hopes. No, its not official. Can I have additional opinions/comments please?.
 
I think that was official because is look like a reason for that was happening in City17
but really I dont understeand very good this (because I dont understeand very good english)
but I see that is FanArt
no?
 
It's fan fiction RJMC.

That's means someone who likes Half-Life write their own stories about it.
 
well in my opinion thats is Fan art(beacause means that we (the fans) make our owns histori,pictures,and others things of the things we are fans)
I write my owns historys of HL, but I forgive then
and I make my own aliens design

thats is ilegal?(joke)
 
And still no comments on my story, c'mon people...
 
hero said:
cool is the soldier in the end supposed to be gordon
I'd... hope not... unless Gordon is now a psycho who gives cruel smiles and destroys his friends computers! :)

I suppose it's possible... ;)
 
It's pretty good, I like the plot so far, but your story needs to be better formatted. Other than that, it's a good story.
 
Stigmata what do you mean by better formatted?. And Brian Damage your "not bad" comment really boosts the ego lol! :P.
 
Max35 said:
Stigmata what do you mean by better formatted?. And Brian Damage your "not bad" comment really boosts the ego lol! :P.
Fantastic start Max35. It could evolve into a good story or campaign for half-life 2. I think Stigmata was referring to the grammar part of the story.

Anyways, when can we expect part 2?
 
Right now! :)

Its a bit longer than the first, and it fleshes out the story a bit. Anyway, I hope everyone thinks its cool!.

Chapter 2: The Briefing

Dr. Kleiner walked swiftly behind the soldiers, who were making their way towards a sleek black chopper placed a fair distance away from the crumbling remains of the secret research building. He glanced back, noting the now dilapidated architecture of the faded brick structure, the wide openness of its outer courtyard. After a moment he looked away, sighing. Those labs had existed even before Black Mesa, indeed the two research facilities seemed to share a symbiotic relationship...before the incident that shattered the world itself occurred. All the research he had conducted over the years, was lost in an instant.

As he approached the chopper, a large sliding door swung open, and he bent his head as he entered the spacious, though crude, confines of the helicopter. The light offered was dim, but sufficient. A few soldiers seated on the benches nailed to the walls glanced at him with weary interest, before returning their gaze to their laps. Suddenly he left a rough hand descend upon his soldiers. Dr. Kleiner swung around, coming face to face with a man who could best be described as forceful. He lowered his eyes away from the harsh green spheres staring intently at him.

“You must be Dr. Kleiner”, the man said at once. Dr. Kleiner nodded, his throat working nervously. The man continued. “I’m sergeant Lyle Banks, I’ve been ordered to brief you by my superiors. But I’ll keep it simple, what do those bastards know about military strategy anyway?”. He scoffed. Dr. Kleiner swallowed once again before speaking. “Well, you can start by telling me what the hell is going on. First you destroy my lab, my life’s research, now you are dragging me to god knows where. I demand my explanation!.

The stern set of Sergeant Bank’s jaw line quieted him abruptly. “It was necessary to destroy the labs, to prevent the Combine from repairing their lost technology. Those were my orders. Now sit down Doctor, and I’ll explain as best I can. Dr. Kleiner wearily did so, seating himself on an empty bench. “Now, let me tell you why we need you exactly. There is a Combine city twenty miles south from here. Recently, its ecosystem has failed due to the leaking of the water tanks, resulting in the first open front we’ve had since the beginning of the war. And that’s of least importance. This insurgence will allow us to obtain a crucial component of the Combine war machine”.

Dr. Kleiner bent forward, his breath rank from nervousness. “And what do I have to do with this exactly?”. Banks smiled “I was getting to that”, he said. “You are one of the very few men that have seen this technology in action, and maybe the only one besides Dr. Kiev Groston who understands it.” Dr. Kiev, the name rang through him like an ethereal echo. A man so devious, so clever, that the Combine themselves bowed before his greatness. Kiev worked with him in the secret labs, emigrating from Russia where he had worked on designs for nuclear missiles during the Cold War. His true goals were unknown, except he denied every convention of normal human life. Dr. Kleiner worked on the rebel technology with Kiev for almost a decade, right up to the point where he completely abandoned their research, in favor of “employment” with the mysterious Combine. In fact, he created the Combine building infrastructure that allowed them to formulate a “hive” of sorts.

“Our commanders have suggested that we strike this weak point in the Combine’s defense, not only reducing them in numbers and their overall resources, but also to snatch this man-made technology from their extraterrestrial fingers. We need you, Dr. Kleiner, in order to safely remove the water genome tanks, and further use them against the Combine. “I suppose I have no choice. Very well”, Dr. Kleiner agreed. “That's good, at least you are being somewhat cooperative, but there’s more. The city itself won’t be where it is much longer, the failed ecosystems within the city are slowly devouring it--literally. So we don’t have much time. Getting the technology intact and in one piece is our main goal, understood?. “Yes”, Kleiner replied simply.

“We will be entering the city through a network of abandoned tunnels, right under one of our own military bases, destroyed by the Combine of course. Which is why it is a good strategy, the Combine won’t suspect us to attack from underneath them. Be ready”. Banks stood, stretched out his cramped legs, and strode to where his fellow soldiers stood conversing. Dr. Kleiner simply stared ahead, contemplating what had been done, and what was about to happen.
 
Tip on formatting: When someone says something, give it its own line.

Not: "How are you today, Joe?", said Bill. "Fine, how are you?", Joe replied.

But:

"How are you today, Joe?", said Bill.
"Fine, how are you?", Joe replied.
 
Okay what do you people think of my story??. Its not like mine are incredibly long reads or something :P
 
So, is Dr. Kleiner your main character? He's a little old.....

Anyway, you have skill, much potencial on the story (into the Combine facility.....)

You use many adjectives, a thing that I (in my personal opinion) dislike.
You ahould have posted this on the "official" HL2 fanfic forum, the mods are screwing our heads b/c we're too few, and any addition is welcome.

I take this chance to announce that, due my recent resignation on NSO, I'll post the "behind enemy lines" new part soon
 
Yes I did get your tip BD and thanks :).

And thank you Sprafa for the comments. About using too many adjectives, I didn't think my story was that descriptive at all, but hey everyone is different. Also, maybe next time I will post this on the fanfic forums, I just like to place these on the main forums because it seems everyone comes here.

Edit: I'm not sure if Dr. Kleiner will be my main character, for right now he is, but I plan to switch view points from time to time.
 
And anyway, it's a thread that we writers can revive any time, not a forum. One is planned for when HL2 comes out, but for the while, the "undying" HL2 fanfic thread is all we got.
 
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